I get that you're trying to go for the whole Cards Against Humanity sort of addition there, however, if 40% of your testers are getting put off by...
@Maikel Yarimizu I'm in agreement with @TravisBach here. This seems pretty on-brand and while it's not my cup of tea when it comes to blurbs,...
So this is kid's literature? It seems very (non-german) fairytale-esque. Depends on who your audience is, to me, I can't see this jiving with most...
Do you mean irreverent?
I don't really know much about conversational blurbs and I haven't done humor in a while, but I'll give it a swing. That start is weak, imo....
I never actually noticed this, oops :p damn spoilers, lol... 112 words, coming right up XD They just wanted a moment’s peace. Instead, they found...
Those look good, but Landry's name is going to look awful small in the amazon thumbnail, and while it's a personal thing, with TDR I've never been...
Not sure if it's just me, but this blurb rubs me the wrong way. It feels to me more like a press release than anything else. It feels extremely...
The "in the last two years" seems a bit unnecessary of a starting point. Second sentence seems overly wordy. Breq's name is repeated too much as...
This is good, if I had to make one change, which is more personal - it would be to terminate the blurb with the party: With the PVE servers...
Yeah, even Asimov who is wildly optimistic for scifi can be a total downer at times
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Agreed, Video Ads work great with facebook. Mailing lists are still great, but they're not as good as they used to be. That being said, there's...
A bit personal, a bit professional. Good questions work well, but bad ones are poison. Cliffhangers are admittedly the same, but the negative...
Tagline. Setup. Twist. Weak start If her enemies can't kill her, the cold will... Overly wordy, too much infodumping. save it for the story....
London Eye, Big Ben/The Clock Tower, Tower Bridge (which is what most people thing London Bridge is), London Bridge (which is a disappointment),...
So, it's not a game, but people think it's a game, but there's no real game mechanics and the interface plays no role in the story. But it's set...
In related news, I have decided to pimp out my toaster... any takers?
Translation is good, as long as it maintains the same standard throughout. There is the occasional grammatical error, but that's to be expected...
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