I've re-read this post several times and pondered it a lot. Haha, you're reaching the uncanny valley of blurbing--it's pretty good but something feels really off at the same time. After more thought, I'm still feeling like there's not enough hooks and too many abstract statements. For example: Here's the blurb with lines that convey no information (or are redundant) removed/modified. She’s one of only a few who knows it’s just a game… While the screens, stats, and combat notifications are normal to most citizens, Scout holds on to the truth. Everyone is trapped in a simulation: a kill or be killed world of survival. As Scout goes about befriending powerful people in one of many underground shelters, she stumbles upon an intriguing item in the black market, a mysterious, non-functioning beacon. Is this the answer? Fighting back against those who have amassed power in the game and who are trying to stop her, Scout struggles for freedom and a way out for all. Explore the costs of survival on an apocalyptic, virtual world thought to be real… Perhaps posting a synopsis of the plot would help us help you. I'd love to stick more specifics into that blurb to illustrate what it needs to be stronger. Edit: Oops, forgot the final line of the blurb. Added it.