Wow...I gotta say that maybe I deserved less than three stars on Goblin. No more sending out second drafts! Heh. Seriously... Things are going well on the rewrite. I'm not changing too much, but I'm fixing some of the problems pointed out by reviewers as I go - and rewriting a good bit. Hope to have it done soon... I'll point out on top of the blurb that it was previously published as Goblin and extensively rewritten and edited. Hopefully I won't get too much flack for giving it a new title. With this better version, I'll also be working on the print edition. So much to do!
While your novel had problems, I actually enjoyed it... however, are you sure you want HACK in big bright letters on the same space as your name? It seems like troll bait... Sample review: 1*/5* Title more indicative of author than contents of the book. - Troll M. Boggart [insert review here]
lol bring it on. meant more in a hacker sense and to follow the naming convention of the entire series more. a writing hack too, though. a few million more words to go to really perfect my craft. thanks for the kind words. hope you'll check out the new version. the big finale will be books 9 - 12 of the series. i remember i always thought of LoTR as (slow book, getting going book, great book!) ... Return of the king had all the action but without the backstory it wouldn't've meant as much? i dunno. we shall see how it goes. it will be closer to the movies coming out.
I'm going to unpub the other one shortly and relaunch it as a new ASIN / book. That way the old reviews don't carry over to the new (better) version. At least that's the plan.
Getting closer. Pretty much a major rewrite of some (most) scenes. Flows a lot better, I think? We shall see.
Working on making Him/Her more distinct/unique. And continual clean-up. Taking out a bit of the slapstick/silliness. Normalizing all the game notifications/data for battles, etc. Rewriting tons of dialogue. Soon!
Me after rewriting damn-near an entire chapter. Ugh. All this polishing will be worth it, I think. Being honest with myself, I can see why some thought of it as sub-par. The characters were a bit TOO immature... and the stilted / crazy dialogue. Going much smoother now. And I get to fix other things that came out in the next three books. Time consuming and boring AF, but it'll be worth it. I hope!
Just be sure to give out ARCs to extremely nasty readers first, that way they pick up any residual mistakes that the nice readers would otherwise notice
I think in writing Roguelike, which is a bit edgier, I found a voice of sorts for the series. I'm rambling...
+100 respect for you it takes alot of humility to go back and say your book sucks and then fix it I also gotta say that world/characterbuilding as a reader is 10x more important then anything else even if it is incredibly boring (which it shouldent be all the time) the world and characters should feel alive and unique and then the ideal is to put characters which the reader would love in any story in a world that you would love any characters in and an amazeing plot
Thanks, you two. It definitely wasn't an easy admission, but the more I edit the book, the more I see wrong with it. Good news is that it should come out better this time.
Big case of telling not showing fixing going on up in here. Should be a good scene and add a bit of depth to MC1. Looking to expand roughly four short paragraphs into a 2k word scene on the rogue side of things. Tinker. Tinker. Tinker.
Well... tell me when you finish tinkering, I would love to re-beta read it... If you think I'm an asshole now...
One of the problems I had with the first half of the book was that the biggest reveal wasn't until around the mid-way point. At the size of the book, it took a while to get there. I'm working on adding a few crucial scenes that will lead up to those discoveries at the 50% mark a bit better. Continuing to work on making each MC their own personality. Oh, hello you!
I actually had some serious telling vs showing going on. This is a brand new, fleshed out scene for the reboot. Spoiler: New Chapter 29 Scene {}
