WIP Incipere Online

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  1. Gryphon

    Gryphon Level 18 (Magician) LitRPG Author Citizen

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    Then I'll have to give it a try once I finish reworking Book ones finer edits. Gotta get a rougher skin eventually, right? Thanks for the advice, Yuli.
     
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    Why would the average raise with more reviews? Has the book been revised to correct for reviewer complaints?
     
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    For the basic ones missed in editing like grammar, I believe the answer is yes. As for story ones, those are matters of preference that don't necessarily need fixed.

    As for reviews raising, I should have chosen more specific terms. I'd like to try to get some more reviews under my belt to help more people find the story to at least give it a shot. Many people won't give a story a shot without X reviews or X stars, so that why I've been doing some research on the subject of turning over more readers into reviewers. With more, it would be a more accurate picture of is this a 3 or a 4 (many peoples cut off threshold according to what I've been reading on other sites). In turn, I would be hoping for a rise in score rather than a fall.
     
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    I totally get the desire for more reviews. I would have considered 30 enough, though, both to provide social proof and a decent representative sample size.
     
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    Maybe, but when I see ones with hundreds or more, it feels small. The percentage is also much lower than I'd like from the number of sales.
     
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    Book two's art is commissioned.
    Ten chapters left to double check for simple fixes before sending it off to an editor.

    Steaming ahead to book three/four!
    Seems the series will be closer to eight than five at this rate...
     
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    Teacher strike delayed my work. Totally worth it to see my own pay raise die though.
     
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    Cover Art is finished for Re:Coded, Amazing V work as always.

    Time to get to work on Hacked.
     
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    That tends to happen a lot, Alpha World was meant to be a trilogy DJ is now working on book 8 XD keep at it though i really wanna read the second book :D
     
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    Well, book two had to be split into two books. I'm worried that what is now book four might have to be as well since it's focusing on his younger sister, Athos himself, and Rani.
     
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    Book two is back, baby!
     
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    Quick status update: Sent book one back to the editor's and got it back. Have plenty to still do before the paperback is ready. Book three is coming along nicely as well, just takes forever to make sure the overlapping scenes in book two and three line up perfectly from the different perspectives.

    Never doing that again.
     
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    I feel your pain. FFO has 2 MC's who split the narrative equally. I made it work but there was much authorial suffering. Never again.
     
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    Worse. They are both in the same scene, from two different perspective in two different books with identical dialogue.
     
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    Woah! Brutal! But also kinda cool. I like that you connected to different books that way. Props for going big.
     
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    Thanks. I just hope it translates well when it's done.
     
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    Just to quickly check: does Athos appear in book 2 at all?
     
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    He does, but its more of an antagonist-like role as its seen by the newcommers when his glitch crashes their streaming session (Chapter 12 and though they don't know it, he's following for quite a few chapters after that).

    Originally, two and three were the same book, but too many people said that the switching perspectives weren't a good fit for it, so I split it up. River and Dante got a more fleshed out background and the majority of book two with a lead in to book three, where as Athos's crew gets book three. At the 2/3rds point of book three, the two groups meet up for an all out brawl to end the first Arc of the series.
     
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    I love editing happy moments.

    “Uncle Athos!” screamed the shrill, small projectile before she collided and crippled his legs. Without the stability of his legs, his body fell to the soft ground in a crumple as the purple blur wrapped herself triumphantly against him. “Boom!”
    It was too much.
    Athos couldn’t help but laugh as Emily put him into a death grip that not even the jaws of life could challenge. After regaining some of his control, he sat up and ruffled her hair lovingly as the rest of the family followed in a matter of moments. “You got me.”
     
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